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Open mouths spur closed minds.
While closed ones show a mind ajar.
Dreams will flow more freely from the later,
And these dreams will take them far.

It's sad to see an arm not working.
Especially when the body works so well.
The ears and eyes had a disagreement.
Putting the rest of the body through hell.

Sensations stir the soul so easily.
Before the heart had time to think.
I always thought spirit and soul were the same,
But others see them as a different link.

Could one be dark and the other light?
Perhaps they are the Yin and Yang.
If they combine I feel so right.
But separate will I feel the pang?

Vivid imaginations are what define some.
Others are left with their school taught facts.
Did we ever really learn anything useful?
Or was it all just an elaborate act?

Indescision is the decision people make.
If we don't choose a side we can never be wrong,
But if we don't choose a side we can't be right.
Is this really the easiest way to get along?

The nose was angered of what we put it through.
In turn we can't smell anything pleasant.
Something we always kinda knew.
Maybe it isn't our fault for the earth's resent.

Must people feel the hollow before they want to fill?
By then the hole is too deep.
They submerged themselves in trouble before they realized,
That the obstacle was too high to leap.

Lips will hide what is within them.
It is why we can't judge people by their covers.
Will the end always change the beginning?
Something not known by even the closer of lovers.

Open mouths spur open minds,
And closed ones show closed minds.
Or did we get it mixed up?
Somewhere along these lines?
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=) something I came up with in a dream. It was weird I was reciting it to myself.=)

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:iconbe-beautiful:
i really loved the begining of this but somewhere along the lines this poem went from amazingly beautiful to beautiful.. idk im picky

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You can't cross the sea merely by standing and staring at the water.
:iconbe-beautiful:
ahh much better

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You can't cross the sea merely by standing and staring at the water.
:iconwhat-is-sanity:
I like this a lot. Good one. :clap:

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A watched pot NEVER boils, until you're smart enough to turn on the stove.
:iconeleaphotogirl:
thanks 4 advice blake!

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If ever there was a representation of my future it would probably be an airplane crashing into the earth from a round of friendly fire aimed by the inventor of the nuclear bomb frying his eyes out. =)
:iconeleaphotogirl:
Thanks *bows* I try.

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If ever there was a representation of my future it would probably be an airplane crashing into the earth from a round of friendly fire aimed by the inventor of the nuclear bomb frying his eyes out. =)
:iconwhat-is-sanity:
Hahaa.

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A watched pot NEVER boils, until you're smart enough to turn on the stove.
:iconwickedmaggot:
I am in total awe
This one blew me away
Especially this part

"Must people feel the hollow before they want to fill?
By then the hole is too deep.
They submerged themselves in trouble before they realized,
That the obstacle was too high to leap."

It really touched me. A tear actually popped out of nowhere :p

Great job. Love the worduse.

A :+fav: indeed

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Liz er det omvendte av Kong Midas; Alt hun tar på blir til BÆSJ!
:iconeleaphotogirl:
lol thanks so much.
That is one of my favorite parts too I am glad you like it.
Thanks for the critique it defiantly boost my confidence in this.
Sorry about the tear. =)

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If ever there was a representation of my future it would probably be an airplane crashing into the earth from a round of friendly fire aimed by the inventor of the nuclear bomb frying his eyes out. =)
:iconwickedmaggot:
no problem! i feel i should be the one thanking you for writing it! marvelous!

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Liz er det omvendte av Kong Midas; Alt hun tar på blir til BÆSJ!

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